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It was a cyanide swing,
sticks and stones made to break bones,
and a spilling of guts meant for love.

A sweeter sin than sacrificing
for a love that didn't want to be loved;
hanging her by the neck before an audience.

Tremors from treasonous words
tickled her throat like a razor,
kissing away the pain with fresh agony.

Common sense cut herself,
bruises of a broken heart littering her neck;
she choked it down to be thrown up against the wall.

Failure found fresh purchase as
poison infected infested wounds;
it promised fate worse than death for the soul.


Don't mind the shadows
They're just stitching her shallow cuts
And confining her to the coffin of affection again.

He should be the corpse,
She could be the killer….
Or he could be the devil and she could be a sinner.

This is their cyanide swing
a backbreaking chorus of love
so insane that when their done she'll break.
Inspiration is a curious thing.
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Lerdavian Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012  Student General Artist
Makes me think of an abusive relationship.
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012
Perhaps it was. Perhaps it wasn't. But your thoughts are appreciated.
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theLUsir Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You have a very morbid way of describing something that should be beautiful. I like that. It gives me a creative tinge in my side to write something along the same concept.

Great poem!
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2012
Thank you for the praise and the comment.

Not all love is beautiful. Some love is destructive, whether self or the one we're with.

I am happy to have inspired you.
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iitz-Z3R0 Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
Brilliant.
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2012
Thank you.
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Dragynking Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Excellent Imagery and word choices! Sounds like some pretty heavy inspiration...better to use it than not though right? haha
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
Listening to one song overe 45 times in one day cause it was bugging me.... so yeah. xD
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Dragynking Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
LOL that'll do it! XD
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Artemis-F-Fox Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderful, I really like the flow of it. Nice job!
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
Thank you. :blackrose:
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Forun-enjeru Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is an amazing piece, the creepy image I get when I read this sends chills down my spine, but yet I want to read it again. And Again.
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
I'm glad you liked it... I had a very interesting time writing it.
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Forun-enjeru Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's amazing how strange stuff can inspire amazing works of art
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Student Writer
love this!! dont mind the shadows there just stictching her shallow cuts nice imagery and interesting message of the poem good job
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
Thanks. :blackrose:
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Student Writer
:) anytime feel free to check out some of my stuff if you like :)
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2012
I finally got the chance to. Its very well done. =) :rose:
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Student Writer
awwwh thank you :)
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012
No problem
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KelaLewis-Morin Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2012  Student Writer
:)
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frtselplupje Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i really like this! It reminds me of a character of a story i'm writing.
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IPhantomSilver Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012
Thank you.
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frtselplupje Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ur welcome :D
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